I don't really like "feature" in this context. "Adam's special object" would be OK, as it is the task that I set you.
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"an object" "I" (capitalized) I would prefer "sets" (simple present) in this description. Did you just forget the 3rd pers. sg 's', or were you thinking of the simple past? ;-)
Instead of "that's because": "This is the reason why" (also, start a new sentence here). The causality is different! The way you put it it means that that Adam has not set his heart on anything because you haven't chosen a private object, and I really don't think you are that powerful! It's vice versa, rather. Please don't start sentences with "because". This word wants to connect sentences! It gets sad when it's on its own :(.
- "haven't chosen" - "private"
I think you should revise irregular verbs as well. Don't panic, you needn't do them all immediately - it's just something that you should do when you've got a little time on your hands. I think it would improve your writing considerably if you had the grammar "at your fingertips", as we say.
Hi,
ReplyDeleteI don't really like "feature" in this context. "Adam's special object" would be OK, as it is the task that I set you.
Language:
"an object"
"I" (capitalized)
I would prefer "sets" (simple present) in this description. Did you just forget the 3rd pers. sg 's', or were you thinking of the simple past? ;-)
Instead of "that's because": "This is the reason why" (also, start a new sentence here). The causality is different! The way you put it it means that that Adam has not set his heart on anything because you haven't chosen a private object, and I really don't think you are that powerful! It's vice versa, rather.
Please don't start sentences with "because". This word wants to connect sentences! It gets sad when it's on its own :(.
- "haven't chosen"
- "private"
I think you should revise irregular verbs as well. Don't panic, you needn't do them all immediately - it's just something that you should do when you've got a little time on your hands. I think it would improve your writing considerably if you had the grammar "at your fingertips", as we say.
Greetings,
Ms Mettjes