I think Amy's room will be really individual, because of her oriental origins.
It will only be a few square meter.
Also I think she will have some comfortable furniture.
She has some pictures of her family and
about many cultural diversities.
The main color will be a purple-gold mixture.
She has in her room only a bed,desk,wardrobe and three littles armchairs.
But she will have many flowers like wild orchids and she will have some joss sticks.
Hi Janin,
ReplyDeletethis design is really great! It's very well-structured and pleasing to the eye. Well done!
The content is good - I can see that some thoughts have gone into your description. However, it's a bit confusing that you state that there is some comfortable furniture and then tell us that there is hardly any furniture at all (especially since a wardrobe cannot be comfortable, can it?).
Yet mainly we need to work on your language!
1. Words / spelling:
"origins" instead of "civilisation"
"furniture" doesn't exist in the plural, so no "s"!
"I" is always capitalized!!!!
"cultural diversities" -> I don't know what you mean!
"wild orchids"
"joss sticks" (plural)
Grammar:
"She has" -> 3rd pers.-sg 's'!
- the "in her room" would look better at the end of the sentence
Style:
"a mixture of purple and gold"
"it will only be a few square metres in size"
You needn't write things like "maybe" in a task like this! I wanted you to invent the room, not to try to find out what it really looks like (which would be impossible). So everything is YOUR CHOICE. If you say she's got wild orchids in her room, then she's got them :-). OK?
So instead of "Maybe she will have", it's a simple "There are many flowers..." or "She has got many flowers".
In your next texts, please pay special attention to the 3rd pers.-sg 's'.
Greetings,
Ms Mettjes